Sunday, May 22, 2011

half-hearted

We said we would give our whole hearts
but we held some back
for safe-keeping,
for a rainy day
when we might need it
for our Self without the other.

Now that rainy day is here
and it turns out
these tattered lint-covered
fragments of heart
are no use at all
as an umbrella.

So the rain pours
down and in and through
these gaping holes
where no holes
were meant to be.

4 comments:

Kelly said...

Great poem. My only suggestion would be that I don't think "Self" needs to be capatalized. The meaning still comes across.

Marjolaine Hébert said...

Tu m'as touché, ma chère ...

Joanne Epp said...

I like how the poem is framed by that word-play on 'whole' and 'hole.'

kerryan said...

Even though this is quite a short piece, I wonder about trimming it down a bit... perhaps ending the first stanza after "-keeping" (which would also help avoid the repetition of rainy day). Also, in stanza two, what about finding a different word for "heart" and in stanza three an alternate for one of the "holes".