Tuesday, May 08, 2007

six

Sun. Traffic moves with only the suggestion
of one-passenger-per exhaust
arms gritty with sun crooked out
of open windows
while cyclists converge on corners
touching tips of tongues
to sweaty upper lips.

In the park, trees bring out leaves from storage
shake out their folds over sticky hems
wriggling with spring’s nervous fingers.
Birds in canopy condos built entirely
of dyed hair and cigarette filters
bide their time
before skies turn sticky with suggestion
and people pick small green scraps
from each other’s shoulders
instead of shaking hands.

Under the trees the shadows move
like the moon through the cycles of the hours;
a busker rehearses, his fingers busy
then his throat
opening
accepting the half-thoughts of elm seed
that breeze the long moist exhale
of everyone out.

5 comments:

kerryan said...

Ooooh! This is fantastic. I think the second stanza is particularly strong. Love the human vs. nature details, the birds' nests of "dyed hair and cigarette filters" and the picking of "small green scraps/from each other's shoulders"

The whole piece just breathes spring.

Polly said...

Hey A -

I had a little trouble with this line break:
exhaust/arms

though I like the confusion of
corners/touching

I had no idea what the green scraps were. (leaves? caterpillars?)

But enjoyed "trees bring out leaves from storage"
and "everyone out."

Yay! Spring!

Regan Taylor said...

I love the "small green scraps" line, too, and even love that I don't know what they are. I imagine those people picking them off aren't necessarily sure what they are, either, so that works for me.

I wasn't as keen on "canopy condos." a little too cute for this poem.

Ariel Gordon said...

Mmm. This may be a hafta-live-in-Winnipeg thing...but the 'small green scraps' are cankerworms. I had two other lines that really spelled out exactly what they were but removed them after I'd cut and pasted the lot into Blogger.

Tracy Hamon said...

Ariel I really like the second stanza, esp these opening lines:

"In the park, trees bring out leaves from storage/shake out their folds over sticky hems"

The natural/ritualistic movement of spring is reflected throughout the poem,and compared and contrasted with people's movement, although like Polly, I wasn't sure about the "of one-passenger-per exhaust/arms gritty..."

I had a few problems with this part as well:

"then his throat/opening/accepting the half-thoughts of elm seed"

"accepting" seems more spiritual than the rest of the poem--although now that I've thought more on it, perhaps not?