clara si, clara
clarity
a mountain
a path
a step, one step
I step
up up up
slow
slow, the mountain
stride step
a stick, a broken hand
a rhythm click
a mountain
path
duff, scruff
y soy soy soy
alive from sleep
weeks lost
alive a step
a stride a click
a white
a granite
summit
clara clarity
alive
amigos, ami
alive.
3 comments:
I like the halting rhythm in this one-- suggests hesitant, start-and-stop movement. I also kind of like the interplay of Spanish words, although I don't understand their role in the poem.
Yeh it's very much like two steps and a halt, I like how the form serves the content. The final word feels like the summit or halting place of the climb, but also the triumph of having survived a head injury...cuz dashing yr brains in is a legit way to cease to be. (three time concussion survivor here)
Beauty! Y me gusta the added español for rhythm. I found just one line a touch harder on the tongue: alive a step .. vague suggestion, perhaps: a step, alive (?)
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