This is lovely -- I particularly like the second stanza and how you really capture the feeling of stale. (Although the bread image felt a little easy... what's something less expected that goes stale?) I really like the ambiguity of time in the last line too.
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This is lovely -- I particularly like the second stanza and how you really capture the feeling of stale. (Although the bread image felt a little easy... what's something less expected that goes stale?) I really like the ambiguity of time in the last line too.
I agree with K.
particularly like last 3 lines!
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