I'm on shaky ground here, since I had to look up quite a few of the words, but I did wonder why you chose the word "saignant" in the second stanza. Otherwise I liked the poem, especially the first stanza.
andie - again, i think it is very courageous of you to dare. I think it's wonderful that you are. there are however grammatical errors (that I won't dare fix, unless you ask ;-)
present tense(with ending e`s silent): elle chuchote comme le vent qui s'envole(?intent of this verb isn`t clear in this line)par les fenêtres et les trouve toutes fermées
ton coeur c'est ma nuit quand je prie dans ton lit elle reprend les mots saignant (sanglant?) dans l'aube
http://www.crisco.unicaen.fr/cgi-bin/cherches.cgi this site offers a great french thesaurus, and because every word will provide you a new link(including its effective usages on the bottom), and the dictionary is always on the top of the page when used. you might want to check it out for: envole, and, saignant.
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i liked the first verse.
had trouble with the second.
oh, i wish i were bilingual -- i'm missing so much this may day!
i wish i were bilingual too. ;)
i speak french like a pre-schooler (the main french-speaker in my family no longer lived in same house by time i was ~4/5).
i understand it ok but am very shy to try and say anything aloud, and insecure about writing.
but i read this in public tonight, just as a dare to myself. the most terrifying thing i cd think of! it worked, the rest went well ;)
I'm on shaky ground here, since I had to look up quite a few of the words, but I did wonder why you chose the word "saignant" in the second stanza. Otherwise I liked the poem, especially the first stanza.
thanks joanne...yeh it kept changing...i sort of wanted the opposite of a bon mot but wasn't sure what :) also sort of one way of viewing dawn.
andie -
again, i think it is very courageous of you to dare. I think it's wonderful that you are. there are however grammatical errors (that I won't dare fix, unless you ask ;-)
oh would you actually though? i would appreciate it. very hard to write in a lanugage you never learned to write in :)
present tense(with ending e`s silent):
elle chuchote comme le vent
qui s'envole(?intent of this verb isn`t clear in this line)par les fenêtres
et les trouve toutes fermées
ton coeur
c'est ma nuit quand je prie
dans ton lit elle reprend
les mots saignant (sanglant?)
dans l'aube
Imparfait tense:
chuchotait...envolait, s'envolait...trouvait...priait...reprenait.
http://www.crisco.unicaen.fr/cgi-bin/cherches.cgi
this site offers a great french thesaurus, and because every word will provide you a new link(including its effective usages on the bottom), and the dictionary is always on the top of the page when used. you might want to check it out for: envole, and, saignant.
:-)nite!
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