Wednesday, May 12, 2010

What We Missed

Tuesday, 12th May Started early this morning and after marching to Mackintosh's, a distance of about 20 miles, we bivouacked for the night; and just at dark a scout rode in with news that our men that afternoon had charged Batoche and taken it, scattering the rebs. in all directions. The news was good indeed, but we felt we ought to have been there.

Almost two months
since I left home.
Paperwork botches and
lack of arms, equipment.
Train to Port Hope, then
to Kingston for our first
ragged parade. Snowstorm
in Fort Henry, training indoors:
then railing westward on steel tracks, broken
by marches. I'll never forget
sleeping in three feet of snow
when the tracks ended at Dalton,
or the 23 mile march across the ice
of Lake Superior: seven hours in a blinding
blizzard, over soft snow. Frigid sleigh rides,
moonlight marches in 30 below, the luxury
of a Pullman Sleeper. The hell
of prairie exposure; sleepy
steamer ride north on the river.

All this to guard supplies and hay,
and miss the final battle by half a day.
***
What We Saw
when we came out of the caves
blinded by sun and sudden silence:
our village over-run by soldiers.

Near the rifle pits, Damase Carrier, his leg
at right angle to his body, rope around his neck, still tied
to the tail of a horse grazing on a bush. He'd been dragged
around the field - they thought he was
Riel.

Calixte and Elzear:
Mme. Tourond kneeling
beside their broken bodies. Smoothing
their hair, bending soundless
to the ground.

Our grey-haired Elders who should have died
in their sleep, stretched before us bloodied
on the field.
Michel Trottier and Isidore Boyer.

Jose Vandal - 75 years old - both arms
broken when he came forth from the rifle
pit. His shirt bloomed roses from a bayonet.

One of the soldiers gave a salthard biscuit to my toddler.
One of the soldiers raped my dark-haired doe-eyed daughter.

Those who could
grabbed their children, turned to the banks and fled.
Those of us with nothing left
began to tend the dead.

4 comments:

Joanne Epp said...

I think you could tighten some lines to give that first long stanza the feeling of a list-- e.g. leave out the numbers (23 mile, 30 below)-- and then it's all summed up so well in the final two-line stanza: 'All this...' etc.

I wonder, too, if you could do something different with 'the hell/ of prairie exposure.' The lines surrounding it have such specific images, I wanted something specific here too.

The second section is quite stark. Very effective. I wonder if you might omit the line 'our village over-run by soldiers'? It's all there in the lines that follow.

i'm quite enjoying this series!

kerryan said...

I love the kicker couplet at the end of the first section. I also like some of the elements that slide between the two (like the images of arms -- lack of weaponry in the first, broken arms in the second).

I also like being part of the (sort of) real time experience of this (IE, that it's all happening in May.)

Marjolaine Hébert said...

I will make the same suggestion I did with an earlier piece - I think 'Mme Tourond' would work much better than Mrs.!
:-)

andie said...

agreed.