Wednesday, May 06, 2009

afternoon, (iii)

Malaya 1955: Ode to a Boy in the Barracks


the precious blond boy
in their care was adored and
cooed over with heavenly smiles

the natives called him pu-pu
(they spoke bahasa-melayu)

the women traced his name
in the sand and they played
with pu-pu for hours on end

he ate with them too: soto,
longan
and pulut, and they
bathed him every night before bed

the kambing betina would giggle
at the soiled folds she uncovered
and tickled on the pale pudgy boy

then she sang him to sleep
as he lay in her arms and pu-pu
would dream ever so long and so deep
.

6 comments:

Unknown said...

I believe

andie said...

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Marjolaine Hébert said...

Ha! Well, don't I have the most interesting comments this evening? funny :-)

Ariel Gordon said...

Nice. I like the tone and the way the poem isn't in a hurry to let us know where/when/who.

(Though having traveled in Malaysia & Indonesia, I think I figured out the where...)

My only question is around your use of the word 'saccharine.' Are you trying to suggest that the smiles are fake? Because that's the contemporary usage of saccharine...

Marjolaine Hébert said...

Thanks Ariel.
No, the smile is sugary sweet, and you're right about its use...I think I just felt in a very traditional mood/place, but I suspect it just doesn't convey what I want it too..

kerryan said...

Without the context Ariel has with this piece, I find myself wanting to know more. Is this poem part of a larger story? Is there a way to give more details without giving too much away? (Maybe something added to the title?) Just a thought...