Unrolling slender strands of hair
from brightly colored curlers –
Thank you, dear.
You’re so kind.
Brushing gently all the locks
into a wispy halo of strawberry blonde –
Thank you. It feels so good.
Did you get it yet and the tip?
Coffee placed nearby
for sips of sweetened decaf –
Good. My niece said she sent it.
She’s so good to me.
Smoothing clean silky tresses tenderly
over delicate translucent ears –
I hope you stay. Please do.
I’d miss you so.
A spritz of spray to hold
things in their proper place –
It’s lovely, thank you, dear.
I feel so pretty now.
3 comments:
Finally a poem I can relate to!! Heh.
I have to say, I like the premise but stumbled over the first line. I think it's that thin and slender mean the same thing.
I wondered also if you couldn't start with the 2nd stanza?
I do like how you made the client delicate, because it's truly so.
there was a good voice in this
i really liked the action, comment, action
I agree with T, start with 'Thank you dear'...
you could lose a few words... 'Coffee nearby/sips of sweet decaf -'
this is such a nice piece, thank you
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