Thursday, May 07, 2009

Finale For a Wash & Set

Unrolling slender strands of hair
from brightly colored curlers –

Thank you, dear.
You’re so kind.

Brushing gently all the locks
into a wispy halo of strawberry blonde –

Thank you. It feels so good.
Did you get it yet and the tip?

Coffee placed nearby
for sips of sweetened decaf –

Good. My niece said she sent it.
She’s so good to me.

Smoothing clean silky tresses tenderly
over delicate translucent ears –

I hope you stay. Please do.
I’d miss you so.

A spritz of spray to hold
things in their proper place –

It’s lovely, thank you, dear.
I feel so pretty now.

3 comments:

Tracy Hamon said...

Finally a poem I can relate to!! Heh.

I have to say, I like the premise but stumbled over the first line. I think it's that thin and slender mean the same thing.

I wondered also if you couldn't start with the 2nd stanza?

I do like how you made the client delicate, because it's truly so.

andie said...

there was a good voice in this

i really liked the action, comment, action

sms said...

I agree with T, start with 'Thank you dear'...

you could lose a few words... 'Coffee nearby/sips of sweet decaf -'

this is such a nice piece, thank you